Editorial Report B

In this blog post I will do the same thing as in Editorial Report B, except for a different section of my project.

Here is the unedited version of my closing section:

While there are a lot of aspects of the drug war that should be considered when creating a new policy, one thing is for certain, and that is that the current polices in place do not effectively help someone suffering from drug addiction. If more people can get educated on the reasons behind addiction, and become more skeptical of the people put in power, we can force an important civil rights movement and provide legitimate help to those that need it

Here is my edited version:

The process of becoming fulfilled or happy is daunting even for someone not addicted to anything. Not everyone is going to find happiness in the same things, as there are billions of people on this planet. The human brain is one of the most complex things on Earth, changing and making itself better through millions of years of evolution. The problem of addiction is extremely complicated, involving various emotional components as well as physical and environmental. The solution of throwing addicts in jail through prohibition is a naïve, unsympathetic attempt to help everyone else besides the actual addict. 

With the new age of the internet, and in a world where it’s becoming harder and harder to hide the truth, it is our responsibility to seek it. Even if you don’t feel compelled to help these people, it takes little effort to have an open mind and reevaluate the cards on the table so that future generations can start from a solid, truthful base. 

During this audio I show pictures of people in prison and also people being happy to appeal to the audiences emotions. 

There was a big shift in content for this section. The first draft I focused more on the drug war and why it's bad. The edited version still addresses the issue but from less of a political pov and more of a philosophical or civil rights pov. I did this to reflect my video more accurately. I focus a lot on the experiences of addicts and the emotional components, not as much about policy. 

Again, form changed a lot for this section as before I had no pictures or audio and in the edited version I do. There is not very much to compare form wise because the first draft did not have any of the key components of a video essay.